Searria H.

This was an interesting poem. Sometimes, I felt that you were forcing your rhyms a little bit. Also, your poem didn't have a rhyming pattern. Sections did, but you changed ...

You had better post all the chapters! You cant do that to us!!! :wink: Wow! It left me with my mouth open(something I don't do very often) If you get ...

Sorry that this took so long, but I've been really busy. Wow. Good story. You're the first writer I've ever met that starts with the ends. I always jump around, ...

Interesting little story. I agree with what everyone has said already. You use the word "embark" twice in the story, and even though the two are fairly far apart, I ...

OOH! Creepy! :twisted: I agree with everything that Rubric said, but I have a few other things to say. When I was little my great-grandmother told me things, and even ...

In such a short story, you were able to create enormous amounts of emotion, and attached me to the characters, even though I hardly knew them. For that, I want ...

First of all, much better descriptions!!!!! My dad had been able to talk to animals and my mom could breath underwater. "Breathe" I couldn’t wait until I was eighteen so ...

Grrr. I had a review all written out, but when I tried to submit it, my computer wouldn't let me, and I lost it. So let's try again. You and ...

You really needed to rate this for language, first of all. Secondly, I'm jelous. Very interesting storyline. I'm not sure you needed the character discriptions at the beginning. It might ...

Very capturing story! I agree with Swottielottie mostly. You need to watch your tenses sometimes. My English teacher always told us to vary our sentence beginnings. You tend to start ...

Very, very nice for 11. I probably can't write something that well. I can see why your teacher gave you an A. I'm not much into poetry, but I really ...

Okay. Interesting story. I enjoyed the storyline. I just have a few spelling and grammar corrections. She went running up the stairs to the small , crampt room Hunter slept ...

Very interesting! I like the interactions between characters. I agree entirely with Avens Dolor. I just have a few small nitpicks. he was unaware he even interacted with others. He ...

Wow! Very interesting Story!!!! In answer to your questions: 1. I have never read any other stories about werewolves, but I don't think there are any out there like yours. ...

Wow, sort of sad huh? Was this supposed to be a free verse poem? I saw the rhymes, but I thought they were sort of in weird places. I don't ...